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视频课题：人教版高中英语选修(知识与技能类)《英语写作》 Unit6 Emails and Descriptions of Places (Writing) 浙江省温州中学
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人教版高中英语选修(知识与技能类)《英语写作》 Unit6 Emails and Descriptions of Places (Writing) 浙江省温州中学
Lesson Plan
人教版高中英语选修(知识与技能类)《英语写作》
Unit6 Emails and Descriptions of Places (Writing)
温州中学 蔡珍瑞
（一）教学分析
1. 教材分析
本课教学内容选自人教版选修（语言与知识技能类）《英语写作》第六单元Emails and Descriptions of places的Reading部分An email from Lucy。 这篇文章以电子邮件的形式通过Lucy的视角描写了北京的胡同，文章有详有略，描写性较强。作者简单介绍了胡同的历史和地理位置，将更多的笔墨放在胡同以及四合院的特点。为了突出这些特点，作者使用了一些具体的形容词，如“high”“grey”“plain”“beautifully decorated”等，同时也增加了一些细节描写，如“some of the lanes are so narrow that only one person can pass through at a time”等。
2. 学生分析
我的学生是高二的学生，他们具备一定的写作能力。在描写类文章的写作中，他们有意识要使文章具体生动，但是他们的困难在于不知道如何使文章生动。目前，他们已经学完了必修的五个模块，在这五个模块中，他们读过一些介绍或描写地点的文章，如介绍英国的Puzzles in geography, 介绍主题公园的Fun and more than fun, 介绍加拿大的A trip on the true north等等。这为训练描写地点的写作课积累了丰富的素材，笔者会在教学中对这些材料加以使用。另外，学生在写作上也存在句式单一的问题，需要补充一些丰富的句型或结构，提升学生写作语言水平。
3. 教学目标
1） 语言能力与学习能力
（1）发展阅读能力：速读并归纳胡同的各个方面以及提炼胡同和四合院的主要特点；通过赏析文章第三段到第五段作者对胡同和四合院的描写，总结出作者通过使用具体的形容词来添加细节使描写更加生动的写作技巧；通过研读描写地点的句子补充写作技巧，即举例子、提供数据以及通过侧面描写人的情感。
（2）发展写作能力：能够初步运用这些技巧生动地描写自己的学校。
2）文化品格与思维品质
通过引导学生观察文章语言，分析和比较不同描写语句的异同，归纳作者写作技巧及写作意图。
4. 教学重点与难点
本节课的重难点是赏析文章语言总结写作技巧并运用写作技巧进行写作。
5. 教学思路
这是一节以读促写的读写课。教师基于学生对文本大意的理解，引导学生赏析作者描写胡同的用词和写作手法。教师再呈现了一些学生曾经学过的关于地点描写的句子并引导学生总结作者如何突出细节描写，并找出作者组织语言增加细节的句型或语法结构。写作之前中通过句子帮助学生初步运用写作技巧，然后过渡到语篇的写作练习。总体思路如图：
（二）教学过程
Step1 提出问题，明确目标
T leads into the topic by guiding students to talk about the school and made clear the learning aim of this period.
T: What do you think of our school? （Ss: Beautiful, large, quiet, modern, big…） T: Why do you think it is beautiful? How big?
T: I'm going to describe our school to my foreign friend Grace in an email. If my email goes like this....What do you think of my writing? （Ss: too general and not vivid enough. ） T: Then how to give a vivid description of a place? This is our learning aim today.
But what kind of description is considered to be "vivid"? (It can produce a clear picture in readers' mind.)
[设计说明] 通过学生熟悉的地点--学校导入话题，让学生畅所欲言。通过追问，请学生提供细节从而引导学生发现自己写作中存在的问题，由此明确本课的学习目标。在导入环节明确学习目标，使学生在接下来的环节有针对性地阅读和思考，从而提高课堂效率。 Step2. 阅读赏析，总结技巧
T leads the students to read the passage and guide them summarize the skill of making the descriptions vivid.
1. Read for the general ideas and details.
T: Let’s read and appreciate a passage describing hutongs in Beijing to see how the writer conveys a clear picture to us.
Read and answer the following two questions: a. What aspects of hutongs are introduced? b. What are the features of hutongs? Ss:(read the passage)
T: What do you know about hutongs after reading this email? （location） Ss: location/history… Ss:...
T: What are the third and fourth paragraphs about? (Houses in hutongs) T: What's the feature of the hutongs? S1: Narrow
T: how narrow?
S2: so narrow that only one person can pass at a time. S2: Others are wider?
T: What are these hutongs like? S2: lined with trees
T: Are these alleys straight?
提出问题 明确目标
阅读赏析 总结技巧
回顾文本 补充技巧
初步训练 熟悉技巧
运用技巧 写作输出
S3: twisting and turning...
2. Study the details and summarize the writing skill
Ss focus on the details they found and compare the sentences with another version without those details and try to tell the difference and summarize how the writer makes the writing vivid. T: (refer to the screen) Pay attention to the underlined parts. If there are no such details, and the text goes like this... Which one do you prefer? Why？ S1:....
T: With these details, it is much easier to imagine what hutongs are like.or it is more vivid. T: In order to make a description vivid, what should we do? Ss: add some details
T: Let's read for more details. Find what details the writer adds to describe the houses in hutongs. Ss Read and fill in the blanks.
T: As you see, some adjectives are used here.
What can we know about the houses from these adjectives? For example, "small and large" they tell about what of the house? "grey"? "plain"?(very simple without any decoration) these are specific details.
Without this these adjectives can you imagine what the houses are like? No. T: in order to make writing vivid, what can you do? Use specific adjectives 3. Practice
Ss describe two things with specific adjectives.
T: Let's have a try. How do you describe the seashell? Can you come up with some adjectives? T: How about a garden?
Actually, in the passage introducing some art galleries in New York the writer describes these two things, what specific adjectives are used here?
Ss: fragile, white, fragrant (have very pleasant smell)
[设计说明] 在教师引导下，学生关注文中的细节并通过与对比没有细节的版本，更直观地感受细节描写的重要性。教师引导学生概括从作者所用的具体的形容词看出该地点在特定某一方面的特点，为学生在写作中选择使用哪些具体的形容词提供了思路。
Step3. 回顾文本，补充技巧
1. Review some descriptions of places and summarize the skills of adding details.
T: Actually, besides the art galleries, we've visited many places in our textbooks. Let's see whether you still remember them?
Ss sees the pictures and tell the name of the places T: What is it? Ss: Disneyland.
T: We know it's fun and more than fun. T: we also followed Li Daiyu to this country Ss: Canada.
T: We visited city Vancouver. In the north there is a thick forest. It is very wet there. T: We also visited a western country... London. We know it is an old city.
T: we also follow Wang Kun and Wang Wei have a journey down the Mekong. Where did they start the Journey? (from a high Tibetan mountain.)
T: Each place has its own feature. Here are the descriptions of these places. Please pay attention to the underlined parts. How do the writers show the features vividly?
You can have a short discussion with your partners. Ss:...
T: First sentence, how does the writer show the port is very old. Ss: ... tell
T: If I tell you the port was built long time ago. Do you know how old it is. So the writer offers us numbers or figures to make the description specific. T: how does the writer show the mountain is so high. Ss: through people's impressions.
T: how does the writer it is so wet there.. how does the writer show the trees are tall. Ss: by giving us an example. by offering figures T: how does the writer it is magical... Ss: give some examples.
T: With so many four ways. Clear pictures like these are produced in our minds. 2. Recognize the structures.
Ss study the four sentences again and tell what structures were used to add these details. T: study the four sentences carefully and tell how the writer organize the details. 1. attributive (-ting/-ed/clause) 2. so ....that
3. adverbial (-ing/-ed/clause) 4. whether... or
[设计说明] 学生通过回顾曾经学过的描写地点的句子，补充一些使文章生动的写作技巧。 同时从语言组织的角度学习这些句子，唤醒学生使用丰富句型的意识。
Step4.初步训练、熟悉技巧
1. London has the oldest port built by the Romans in the first century AD. 2. At one point we were so high (in the Tibetan mountain) that we found ourselves cycling through clouds. 3. It is so wet in the north of Vancouver that the trees are extremely tall, some measuring over 90 meters. 4. The Disneyland will bring you into a magical world and make your dreams come true, whether you are traveling through space, visiting a pirate ship or meeting your favorite cartoon.
Ss tick out the better sentence to describe the place and tell why. And then combine the two sentences into one.
1. The amber room was a treasure.
口It was decorated with gold and jewels and it took the country’s best artists about ten years to make.
口It cost a great amount of money and took the country’s best artists a long time to make. 2. In Futuroscope, visitors can get close to parts of the world they have never experienced. 口You can take part in a variety of activities.
口You can go to the bottom of the ocean, fly through the jungle or visit the edges of the solar system.
3. The path up the mountain was very steep. 口It was very hard for us to climb.
口We were soon sweating and out of breath. 4. Disneyland also has many exciting rides.
口You can take giant swinging ships and terrifying free fall drops. 口You can take swinging ships and free fall drops.
T: we know we can add details by using some proper adjective and structures as follows. Let's put them into practice.
T:Since you've picked out the better details, please combine the two sentences into one.
[设计说明] 学生通过运用上一环节的写作技巧来选择恰当的细节描写，然后通过使用丰富的句型来组织语言，添加细节。通过句子的训练为本课最后的段落写作输出做好铺垫。 Step5. 运用技巧、写作输出
1. Complete an email by giving a description of the school.
T: I think you've had the ability convey a clear picture in your description.
Please help me describe the school. What are you going to tell about your school?
1. Give a vivid description of your school by adding proper details. 2. Use various sentence structures.
2. Listen to some students’ work and assess their peers' work.
T: Listen carefully when your classmates are reading it and check whether they have added details and used various structures.
[设计说明] 通过段落写作介绍学校来巩固本节课所学的写作技巧，同时通过同伴评价加深学生的印象。
Homework:
Assess and improve your writing according to the questions below: 1. Do I add details to make the descriptions vivid? 2. How do I add details to make it vivid?
use specific adjectives offer figures give examples
describe people’s feeling/impression
3. Do I add details through various structures?
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